Rebz :)

I agree the other other reveiws, far to many commas. Otherwise, this piece is really quite good! When I'm 34 I'll still be a little kid ;) nothing wrong with ...

This reminded me of The Lovely Bones :) I loved how you wrote it, and the 'five fatal mistakes' drew me in. With her death though, I think you can ...

Very good! I dabble in photography myself, and those pics took talent! Really captures the power of the sea :)

You're right, I can do much better. But looking back, I was barely 13. And it was my first ever. I will yet again edit, make it longer, and with ...

Yeah I should really add to this... but I had writers block, then I started on another and forgot about this. I don't even have a title. I shall work ...

I know how you feel! I can not stand Maths! This poem right here, story of my life! Somehow, every Maths class, anime ends up on my paper. Funny that. ...

Overnight your canine passed awayWarm tears float the day astray.Regret seems to singe as it meltsSilence drowns in the plastic pool of sorry . Noise and colour, brainstained fangs .The ...

Hmmm, I like the first version. I could see her pretty, pretty eyes better! Of course, to make it better it's always fun to wear some mascara! I love this ...

Deep, heartfelt, saddening and sort of hard to follow. I'm afraid I can't pinpoint how to make it easier to read, but yeah, it was good. ~ R e b ...

Anime! I loooove it!!

Hey! Firstly, very well written. I'm not fussy on grammar (so I wasn't looking) and nit-picking words is more my forte. I love how you described the first stanza. It ...

Thankyou, constructive critism! Yeah, I'll edit it and make it more emotional in the last paragraph, and fixed up the 'one of my loves' part. PS. Two o'clock Saturday = ...

First photo, unbelievably cool. The second one... ehhh, not so much. It was cute, but not WOW! However, the first one was. Perfect angle, nice colour... and I dabble in ...

Oh my God... I absolutely LOVE these! The darkness gave it a certain mysterious edge, the way your friend was close, you could see the distant look in her eyes ...

Hey! Now that was interesting, and unique (thank God! I'm sick of vampire romance stories!). I have got one nitpick: I swiftly knelt in front of the lady who entered ...